Jake

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Jake; Another short story.
Topic Started: Mar 3 2009, 02:56 AM (214 Views)
Chaos	Mar 3 2009, 02:56 AM Post #1
Master of the Chaotic Method Posts: 240 Group: Admins Member #1 Joined: Apr 1, 2008 Steam ID Katanoki	Jake stood behind the boy as he pulled a binder from his bag, turning and handing it to him. Jake opened it, skimming the contents page by page. "Wow... You wrote all this?" "Yup, every last one!" And I draw pictures and I write stories about them, too! Although I like making up songs the best." David turned a few of the pages for him. "That one's my best one." He kept reading for a few minutes, before handing the binder back. "You know, I actually used to draw a lot." "Oh?" "Yeah, and not just coloring pages! I did... Um... Illustrations!" "Really? How good are you now?" "Oh, I stopped." David paused, before asking, "Why?" Jake shrugged. "I dunno. I just stopped. My parents said it was a good thing, because I could have failed 1st grade because I was always drawing instead of listening to Miss Gergen." The boys shared a silence, and within that silence, footsteps crept, up Jake's stairway, to the front of his door. He sighed, even before the knock came. "Jacob, your medicine." "Yes, mom, be right there." The boy seemed to pause for the slightest moment, looking to David for... What? Jake eased the binder back into David's hands. "Here, you take this..." David watched him open the door, walking out of sight. David looked down at the notebook, somehow, without knowing why, hurting.



Robyn	Mar 5 2009, 11:25 PM Post #2
Nublet Posts: 6 Group: Newbies Member #6 Joined: Sep 24, 2008	Sad, and confusing, but not in a bad way. It's hard to understand why a character is feeling something when you have such little time with the characters in this format.



Chaos	Mar 5 2009, 11:41 PM Post #3
Master of the Chaotic Method Posts: 240 Group: Admins Member #1 Joined: Apr 1, 2008 Steam ID Katanoki	Yeah... This one isn't as good as the one about Tracy, but I still sorta like it. It needs work, though. Lazy parents fucking ruin lives. Our society fucking ruins lives, but y'know. Shit sucks.



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